英國(guó)留學(xué)動(dòng)機(jī)信的寫作原則與寫作技巧
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08-14, 2017
留學(xué)文書中的動(dòng)機(jī)信是想要出國(guó)留學(xué)的學(xué)生申請(qǐng)學(xué)校必須遞交的重要材料,主要用于闡述學(xué)生的個(gè)人背景、綜合能力和學(xué)習(xí)目的。如果說(shuō)個(gè)人簡(jiǎn)歷是對(duì)個(gè)人學(xué)習(xí)和職業(yè)經(jīng)歷的簡(jiǎn)單介紹,那么動(dòng)機(jī)信就是一份讓人能夠更加了解你經(jīng)歷和計(jì)劃的材料。由于留學(xué)文書是招生官了解申請(qǐng)者綜合能力的唯一途徑,其重要性不言而喻。本文主要對(duì)動(dòng)機(jī)信的寫作內(nèi)容、寫作原則、寫作技巧、寫作流程進(jìn)行探討。
一、動(dòng)機(jī)信的寫作內(nèi)容
留學(xué)動(dòng)機(jī)信也稱留學(xué)計(jì)劃書。它的目的在于讓申請(qǐng)者清楚的表達(dá)出來(lái)個(gè)人基本情況、申請(qǐng)學(xué)校及專業(yè)的原因以及未來(lái)的職業(yè)構(gòu)想。我們根據(jù)這3個(gè)部分逐一說(shuō)明:
1.個(gè)人基本情況:與個(gè)人簡(jiǎn)歷不同,這里的個(gè)人基本情況是要著重表述個(gè)人的學(xué)習(xí)和工作期間的主要業(yè)績(jī)。
2.申請(qǐng)?jiān)?/strong>:明確闡述申請(qǐng)某某學(xué)校以及某某專業(yè)的理由,要告訴校方這個(gè)學(xué)校為什么吸引你,學(xué)習(xí)這個(gè)專業(yè)對(duì)你有什么幫助。
3.未來(lái)職業(yè)構(gòu)想:具體說(shuō)明在畢業(yè)之后,你準(zhǔn)備從事的工作。切忌使用貢獻(xiàn)、奉獻(xiàn)、報(bào)效之類空洞的詞匯,而應(yīng)該表明去什么企業(yè)、公司,在什么職位上負(fù)責(zé)什么工作,并且最好把預(yù)期的年薪也寫出來(lái)。也許很多學(xué)生會(huì)說(shuō):以后的事情,現(xiàn)在怎么能知道?其實(shí),學(xué)校就是想了解你是否有明確的求學(xué)目的,并允許學(xué)生有根據(jù)、符合邏輯的設(shè)想。
另外,在申請(qǐng)高等商學(xué)院的時(shí)候,學(xué)校還會(huì)特意讓學(xué)生談?wù)勛约旱膬?yōu)缺點(diǎn)和性格特征。
二、動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作原則
1.專業(yè)性原則
國(guó)外高校之所以愿意提供各種獎(jiǎng)學(xué)金,邀請(qǐng)你去學(xué)習(xí),并不是因?yàn)槟愕挠⒄Z(yǔ)學(xué)的比別人好,GRE考的比別人高,或是想給中國(guó)免費(fèi)培養(yǎng)人才,而是因?yàn)槟憔邆湎喈?dāng)?shù)膶I(yè)水平,能為他們做實(shí)驗(yàn),能給他們出文章,在攻讀學(xué)位期間所做的工作能夠?yàn)閷W(xué)校做出貢獻(xiàn),因此在動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作中,應(yīng)當(dāng)重點(diǎn)寫對(duì)于申請(qǐng)專業(yè)的認(rèn)識(shí)或者在此專業(yè)領(lǐng)域取得的成就。
2.個(gè)性原則
當(dāng)你坐在計(jì)算機(jī)前開始寫作的時(shí)候,你一定要想清楚自己是什么樣的人,自己有什么優(yōu)點(diǎn)。 如果你不能讓對(duì)方相信你的聰明和愛因斯坦是同數(shù)量級(jí)的(這種人指的是畢業(yè)于名校,GPA在3.8以上),那么你就應(yīng)該讓他相信你的勤奮或是堅(jiān)韌的毅力與阿甘相比有過(guò)之而無(wú)不及。畢竟,聰明僅僅是成功的一個(gè)因素,而你的毅力,合作力等等可能是成功更重要的因素。你應(yīng)該善于揣摩對(duì)方的心理,要知道,不管是中國(guó)的導(dǎo)師還是外國(guó)的導(dǎo)師都希望自己的學(xué)生把大部分時(shí)間花在實(shí)驗(yàn)上,而且做事要有責(zé)任心,要有百折不撓的勇氣,而有時(shí)聰明的學(xué)生可能這方面做的并不很好。 #p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
3.自信原則
西方人喜歡自我表現(xiàn),他們喜歡自信的人。不管你是寫PS,還是去見簽證官,或是以后在課堂上做presentation,你都要牢記這個(gè)原則。你要象展示你的傳家寶一樣自信的向他們展示你閃光點(diǎn),也要以expert的語(yǔ)氣大談你做過(guò)的課題。所有你的這些語(yǔ)氣,都會(huì)為你贏得不少分?jǐn)?shù)的。
三、動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作技巧
1.學(xué)會(huì)講自己的故事。因?yàn)樗腥松暾?qǐng)的目的地都是一樣的,甚至大部分人的學(xué)歷也都差不多,但是每個(gè)人的經(jīng)歷是不一樣的,要給人留下深刻的印象,就要突出與美化自身的經(jīng)歷:是什么經(jīng)歷把你帶到今天這樣一個(gè)位置,讓你想要申請(qǐng)這樣一個(gè)項(xiàng)目等。這塊如果說(shuō)得好,就能讓人對(duì)你有一個(gè)很不一樣的認(rèn)識(shí)。舉個(gè)例子:我?guī)椭鶨den申請(qǐng)德國(guó)DAAD全獎(jiǎng)和金融數(shù)學(xué)博士,在為他打造Motivation Letter的時(shí)候就和他溝通了很久,仔細(xì)琢磨了他的背景和經(jīng)歷,并幫他挖掘了他經(jīng)歷中一個(gè)我覺得可以用來(lái)具體闡述與美化的問(wèn)題(問(wèn)題也盡可能地detailed),并提出希望通過(guò)申請(qǐng)就讀的這個(gè)program解決這個(gè)問(wèn)題這么一個(gè)思路。總結(jié)說(shuō)的話,關(guān)鍵就是要挖掘自己的故事(不論是經(jīng)歷上的故事,還是學(xué)歷上的故事),不能泛泛而談要具體詳細(xì),但又不能使用太多的詞句。這個(gè)是一個(gè)難點(diǎn)。
2.仔細(xì)研究學(xué)校。我們一定要對(duì)所申請(qǐng)的學(xué)校有足夠的了解,與其他學(xué)校的不同點(diǎn)在哪里,哪一點(diǎn)特別吸引你,是老師?是氛圍?還是其他?舉個(gè)例子:可以去關(guān)注一下意向?qū)W校的官方facebook或twitter這類官方媒體,這樣能夠更了解學(xué)校的真實(shí)形象,最新的咨詢,最接地氣的一面?;旧厦總€(gè)學(xué)校都有自己的臉書,甚至有些學(xué)校的科系還有一些小群體,如果能找到的話也非常有用。
3.仔細(xì)研究這個(gè)國(guó)家。尤其是選擇非熱門留學(xué)國(guó)家的同學(xué)們要把這個(gè)理由講清楚,因?yàn)楹芏嗳藭?huì)有“放著那些熱門又發(fā)達(dá)的國(guó)家地區(qū)不去,為什么要來(lái)這個(gè)偏僻或不那么受歡迎的地方”這樣的疑問(wèn)。寫這一塊內(nèi)容時(shí),如果能跟自己申請(qǐng)的科系搭上一些關(guān)系是最好的。舉個(gè)例子:一個(gè)學(xué)生是學(xué)數(shù)學(xué)的,申請(qǐng)的是德國(guó)的大學(xué),所以我就寫德國(guó)是一個(gè)很嚴(yán)謹(jǐn)?shù)膰?guó)家,而且歷史上還出了很多優(yōu)秀的科學(xué)家數(shù)學(xué)家,都是能和數(shù)學(xué)掛鉤的內(nèi)容。
四、動(dòng)機(jī)信寫作流程
1.先不管篇幅,把自己的想法都寫下來(lái)。
2.審查每一個(gè)句子的意義,如果是內(nèi)容重復(fù)或者能夠合并的,就將兩個(gè)句子變成一句,如果只有一點(diǎn)點(diǎn)價(jià)值的,就把唯一有的價(jià)值合并到其他句子中,沒有價(jià)值的句子就刪除。這個(gè)過(guò)程是比較耗時(shí)的。#p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
3.整體檢查語(yǔ)言、結(jié)構(gòu)和邏輯。留學(xué)動(dòng)機(jī)信一定要具體并且全文貫通、有前因和后果,按照西方人的說(shuō)法就是有邏輯性。在撰文時(shí),一定要以具體事例配合你所表達(dá)的中心思想,使文章顯得生動(dòng)??傊痪湓挘壕唧w、生動(dòng)、邏輯性強(qiáng)、中心思想明確。
參考范文:
Faculty of Electromechanical Engineering, Guangdong University of Technology, No. 100 Waihuan Xi Road, Guangzhou Higher Education MegaCenter, Panyu District, Guangzhou China, 510006
Dear Mr. /Mrs. :
I appreciate that you can take time off your busy schedule to read my letter. This is a letter of my motivation to apply for the Master degree of Precision Manufacturing(MPM) of University of Applied Sciences of Southern Switzerland (SUPSI).
First, allow me to introduce myself. My name is Liu Yang. I’m a first grade postgraduate of Guangdong University of Technology(GDUT). My major is Mechanical Engineering and Automation. I get my bachelor's degree in Mechanical Engineering and Automation at Wuhan University of Technology in 7thJuly, 2007. After I graduated from my university, I worked in Jiangling automobile joint-stock company for about 1year. Then I took the Postgraduate entrance examination and was enrolled in GDUT at last.
There are some hearty reasons why I like SUPSI and the major of MPM:
First,I am interested in MPM, for I have been studying in Mechanical Engineer- ing and Automation since I started my university life. It’s well known that this major plays a foundational role of the developing of industry and it is easy for us to find a job.MPM, in my opinion,is a similar major with Mechanical Engine- ering and Automation.Exactly speaking, it’s the specialization and concretion of Mechanical Engineering and Automation. MPM in SUPSI based on a set of prominent and well balanced lectures that not only promote individual profess- nal skills and cultivate their ability but also their creativity, management level and shape attitude. I think I can get more professional knowledges than I can get inland and extend my knowledge fields to enhance my competitive strength.
Second, SUPSI can offer me good teaching quality. SUPSI is one of the eight Universities of Applied Sciences in Switzerland.The institution focuses on education based on professional need and on applied research, and , at the same time, it provides a practice-oriented education and offer a wide range of master’s programs. The educational goal of MPM in SUPSI is to shape new professsional figures characterized by reseach and operate skills through aneffective training path constantly merging reseach and education. For my part,I prefer practice-oriented educcation to pure reseach-oriented.
Third, SUPSI can affords me a good environment to study. According to Global Competitiveness Report 2009-2010, Switzerland ranked number one among a total of 131 surveyed countries.It’s a reflection of a world-class capacity for innovation, combined with a highly sophisticated business culture. The country has a well-developed infrastructure for scientific reseach,with close collaboration between the leading research centersand industry. What’s more, the top-notch infrastructure, well-built education and health care systems as well as clean and beautiful environment all provides a safe,conve- nient, comfortable and healthy living environment for me to live and study.#p#分頁(yè)標(biāo)題#e#
Additional, SUPSI gives a preferential tuition fee. The institution cooperates with our university.Due to the cooperation between the Chinese and Swiss governments on this project,the fees are low.I think choosing to study in SUPSI can lower the financial pressure to my family. Furthermore, after graduating from SUPSI, I will become more competitive and enjoy a more positive prosp- ect in future job market.
Finally, thank you for your reading again. I am seriously interested in studying at your university. What I care most is, whether I can be accepted by you, I wis- h!
Looking forward to hearing from you and with best regards to you!
Yours sincerely,
Liu Yang
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